Unexpecting
1.
Bill:
Bill is sitting on the couch reading a book.
2.
Henry:
Henry is sneaking out of the kitchen trying not to be seen by Bill.
3.
Bill:
Keeps reading.
4.
Henry:
Dives behind the couch trying not to be seen and scare Bill.
5.
Bill:
Bill looks out of the corner of his eye and looks at where he is hiding, he
know Henry is trying to scare him.
6.
Henry:
He peaks over the edge of the couch behind Bill getting ready to scare him.
7.
Bill:
bill continues to read.
8.
Henry:
Jumps up behind Bill ready to scare him.
9.
Bill:
Grabs Henry’s head and flips him over the couch.
10.
Henry:
Lays there for the rest of the day.
11.
Bill:
Continues reading then gets up and leaves.
1. Don't scared people that are smarter than you.
ReplyDelete2. Scared when henry is flipped over the couch.
3. I think you should add billy saying you can't scare me.
4. I don't think nothing should be removed.
1. Don't try to scare your friends when they probably know where you are.
ReplyDelete2. I think laughter is going to be invoked by this story
3. They could add some dialogue
4. Don't just make Bill sit there and look at him, make him laugh when he's done pulling Henry over the couch.
1. don't do to others that you don't want done to you.
ReplyDelete2. drama and comedy.
3. you could add some dramatic pause
4.i don't think anything needs to be removed
the moral is to be careful what you do and how
ReplyDeletelaughter, suspence, and dissapointment are invoked
add some dialogue or have bill use henry as a foot rest before leaving
dont have it be obvious that bill saw him tie this into dialogue.
1- Prepare before you scare
ReplyDelete2- Laughter
3- Better Flow
4- Have Bill comment on how Henry did
the moral is to be careful what you do and how
ReplyDeletelaughter, suspence, and dissapointment are invoked
add some dialogue or have bill use henry as a foot rest before leaving
dont have it be obvious that bill saw him tie this into dialogue.
1- Prepare before you scare
ReplyDelete2- Laughter
3- Better Flow
4- Have Bill comment on how Henry did